Originally Posted by healthagent
This makes no sense:
"Welcome to home page of Insurance Junction, designed to meet requirements of everyone related with exciting field of Insurance."
This is a poorly structured sentence. I believe what you're trying to write is:
"Welcome to the home page of the Insurance Junction, designed to meet the requirements of everyone related to the exciting field of insurance."
Many thanks for visiting my club page and for sharing your observations with me. I have made the changes as suggested by you, hope it will result into better response from new visitors to my club page.
I also appreciate your honest opinion about our business concept. However, initial response from our connections is highly positive. But, it will be too early to reach to any conclusion.
Thanks once again,
With kind regards,
Aryan
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Originally Posted by al3
Hi !
Many thanks for doing all the hard work on Google for me.
In all my profiles I used pic of my 5 yr old son. I understand it was not a very professional way of doing things, but somehow my 13000+ direct connections never had any problem with this. the pic was taken just before a fancy dress competition.
I am owner partner of Aryan Offshore Solutions. We are providers of some simple but highly effective services to our clients like Country Specific Business Listing Service and Comprehensive Business Promotion Service.
Insurance Junction is our ambitious project. With all my background in Insurance this is something I always wanted to do. I am sure that with the support of my online and offline friends this business will takeoff soon.
With kind regards,
Aryan Shrivastava