I just got done making this and I'm not finish with it, but what do you think of this concept or idea? I know there is some kind of grammer issue somewhere. I will change it at least 100 times before I use it, but what do you think of the concept?
People spend more time planning their vacation then their own deaths.
My wife and I are going on vacation soon for the summer. My wife has been planning it for weeks and spent a lot of time on it. Have you ever notice that people can spend weeks planning a 2 to 5 day vacation? My wife tells me that there is just so much to plan and you don’t want to get where you are going and not have the things you need and we might forget something important.
I have to ask which is more important, planning for a vacation or planning for your death and what is going to happen to your family? I believe that most people spend more time planning their vacation, then their own death. Just stop and think about it.
Have you made enough plans for your death? Does your family know where to bury you at? Do they know who you want to be your 6 pallbearers? Do they know if you are on life support what you would want to happen? What kind of plans have you made for you death? Are you planning your death or just letting your family worry about everything?
Stop and think about on your last vacation how much planning went into it. If something happens to you right now, is your family ready?
Let me help you protect your family at their worst time. Let me come out and visit with you and help you plan your death and protect your family.
When I leave everything will be taken care of and your family will be protected. Your family will know what you would have wanted and will get the protection that they need.
Do you want to be remembered as the guy that planned for his funeral and took care of his family or the guy that spent more time planning a vacation then planning his own death?
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Mark Rosenthal aka markingriffin
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Nope, I just typed this up. I've seen it on tv and in ads about clients spending more time planning a vacation then on planning their own death.
Now, I'm trying to make a client piece from the idea. I think it is a great concept and I want to go with it. I just need some help with it. What should I add to it or what should I not say?
I rather get this piece fixed and able to send out soon.
Everyone is getting ready to go on vacation with school letting out and now would be the time to mail it.
Is there anything that you guys would add to it.
Bill, what would you use instead to grab them?
Moonlight, thanks for the grammer help. I try and work on the concept and worry about grammer last. I sometimes loose my train of thought when I stop and work on spelling or grammer. That is my weakness.
A southerner went to New York and asked a local, "Do you know where the Empire State Building is at?" The local said, "You idiot, you never end a sentence with a preposition". The southerner replied, "Fine, Where's the empire state building at, a$$hole!"
Would you rather your family sleep comfortably when you are no longer there to provide for them or have a nice hotel to sleep in while on vacation? You decide, your family is always going to depend on you.
I am sure this is a little long but I am not a copy writer. I think its a good start though.
Would you rather your family sleep comfortably when you are no longer there to provide for them or have a nice hotel to sleep in while on vacation? You decide, your family is always going to depend on you.
I am sure this is a little long but I am not a copy writer. I think its a good start though.
***Husbands***
Do you want your last thought to be; that of your wife climbing into bed with another HAIRY legged man, and your children calling another man Daddy.
If not, call me.........LOL
It could work......
In all seriousness I have seen similar articles in the mail soliciting life insurance.
I like the idea and the concept, and sending it out while people are planning their vacation is an ideal time.
Address this piece to the wife,As we all know she's the one that will make it happen ,I've had more guys tell me that she can marry another guy or he doesn't want to leave a rich widow(2 or 300,000???) I just got this from a NEWLYWED, no kidding!!!!!!!Emotional marketing does work!!
Vacations are fun! But what about when you are gone? Does your family have enough money without you take care of their needs? Call me today, and I personally guarantee you I will create a solution to your needs.
Mark here is my input. Personalized this piece more. Tell a story about a situation that you were where they were not prepared. No living will, no advance directive, no power of attorney, no life insurance. and no preplanning. Buried like a pauper in a place that would not have been their choosing because there was no money or no plan. You have got to capture their attention. Stories and headlines capture mine.
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Mark, I am not trying to hi-jack your thread but I think this might spark some ideas. This is not written for final expenses but toward LI but could be adapted. This is something I am working on and is the style I like to use. Story telling and tugging at emotions. What does anyone think? Is it good or bad? How would you change it?
LIFE INSURANCE
A couple of months ago one morning I stopped at an Auto Repair Shop to have my oil changed. As I was waiting, a woman in her late 40’s or early 50’s walked in with a friend asking to have a tire repaired. As I studied her face I could see she looked tired and drained, as if she carried a great load. The service manager had the car pulled in, went out into the shop returning a few minutes later with the news that the tire was unrepairable and that she needed four tires on her car because they were all bald and worn out.
The woman’s friend stepped in a quickly explaining that the woman’s husband had just died from cancer. All her money had been spent on the funeral and she had no money and no job. All the husband had left her was medical bills, debt, and a car with worn out tires. He said friends and family had been helping out as much as possible but they were tapped out.
When the service manager heard this he offered to install four good used tires the size the woman needed for only $20 each. The woman said she would be back on Monday but would only replace two tires because it was all she could afford and she couldn’t get the $40.00 until then. My heart was sad as I listened and watched this scenario. The woman was slump shouldered as she left the shop.
Haven’t we all seen people in this situation. The can set up at the check outline at the grocery store to help the husband bury the wife who was the victim of a drunk driver with no car insurance. The 60 year old widow working at McDonald’s because that’s the only job they can find and they HAVE to work to survive. My friend lost his wife at age 40 leaving him with three children to raise. The lose of her income forced him into bankruptcy.
Now I applaud our society for helping families in sad, tragic situations and institutions for hiring older individuals with no work experience. However, what disturbed me was this question: When she married her husband was this what she saw as her future? Was this the plan? Was this the way her husband had intended to leave her? Did he want her to remember him only for leaving her with a pile of debt, no way to pay the bills and no income?
Let's assume some idiot with no brains, no brakes and a few drinks under his belt catches up with you at an intersection when you're coming home to you wife and kids? Will there be enough income until the kids are grown, money for final expenses, emergency funds, college funds, and mortgage cancellation. How about a little bouquet of roses on your anniversary date and a modest selection of Christmas gifts for a few years to let your family know you still love them even after you're not here to deliver them yourself? If tragedy visits your family are you prepared? Do you have plans for what you are going to do then that you don’t have time to do now?
I love my wife and I have made plans to insure that she will never HAVE to work at Wal-Mart or McDonalds after I am gone. Having watched the sad situation of a grieving distraught widow who could not afford two used tires I urge you to make sure your loved ones aren't left in that sad situation. If you need to review your planning or need help call me today! Don’t put it off another day!
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